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H e r e
In my hands…
Barely holding on to my flushed fingertips,
Is a dream.

Just an ordinary day dream,
One held precious and known only to me…
But within this fantasy, is a hidden promise…
A promise and a question,

         H e r e
I cup my hands and let the starlight ruffle it's feathers,
Like a bird of thread, with eyes of gold…
Do you understand how fragile it is?
If you unravel it enough, you will find what's left of my heart,
Since I broke it in two for you.

                   H e r e
Underneath this twilight canvas,
I hold my hands up to you and watch your eyes change,
Don't you understand…
Don't you even have an idea…
Of what this delicate wisp of a daydream,
Could be…

                            H e r e
If I place it in your hands,
I trust you with my heart,
If you let it fall,
It will unravel and become a tangle of doubt…
Don't you understand…
What I'm trying to whisper to you as you sleep so far away?
just something from the depths of my mind and heart before I go to bed, no biggy :shrug: hope you like it
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DevlinTheBlack Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2012
Hope granted, I like it
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WhiteWolf614 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That was really great! As the Alpha said, very inspirational and different. Nice work! :)
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topazcat511 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you so much :)
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WhiteWolf614 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem!
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the-alpha1 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow, very inspirational, you are something entirly diffrent, you can be something great, i know it, keep on writingand be somewhere else then just deviantart, but it is a start. You'll do great things in writing, i know it. Good job!
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topazcat511 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Holy cow thats one of the nicest things I've ever received as feedback! thanks! ^_^
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the-alpha1 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
it's nothing, i'm just helping a fellow writer, not many of us left in the world.
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topazcat511 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
too true :nod:
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the-alpha1 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
yeah ,keep up the great work you'll do something great.
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